Lace Heart
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Prima Donna - critique, please. Must be constructive.?
Prima Donna dances
Lavished in her pink lace and heart lockets
Her form displaying yearbook quality.
She begins to drip black, acidic sweat
Onto her entranced audience
Setting their skin afire.
Prima Donna watches, gazes on,
As the thrashing and screaming begins.
Not a hair curls out of place
On her perfect head.
And she stands, as a cactus might,
Tall and ignorant to the area around her
And never taking a step towards
Or back from the chaos she caused.
I like it a lot.
Not cliche and simple rhymes.
I like your structure and flow.
Good imagery too.
Only thing I can comment on..
about the cactus stanza...
I would add another descriptor to the catcus line..
like
"She stands cemented in place as a cactus "
"Her soul warped and dry"
Tall and ignorant to the area around her
I don't know if that was what you were aiming for... but even if you just wanted to add
and she stands, as (rigid) as a cactus..
I think it would end it perfectly
If you were going for the nonchalant tone for that particular line.. I think you should keep it how it was
Maybe you could add a title to suit the mystery of the damage she has done.
Other than that, I think it is a wonderful poem
Sterling Silver "Lace Heart" Pendant and 2-Strand 17-1/8...